Friday, May 7, 2010

The Love Gymnast: Flash 55


Flash Fridays are about telling stories in exactly 55 words.


Here's a tale about a lady named Doris who is insanely in love with her new beau, Guido. She sits at her desk, thinking of him:


The audience of organs freezes in midbeat.
The stomach recoils, leaps high on its toes,
lands, sprints, does a stunning
double back flip with a twist, sticks the landing.
Thunderous applause from the kidneys.
The intestines wave their arms.
The delirious lungs whistle
and the heart pounds its feet
in the bleachers.
Meanwhile, Doris shivers.

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The photo is from a gymnastic coaching website. Sorry I can't be more specific.

31 comments:

anthonynorth said...

That was a very interesting 55. Excellent.

järnebrand said...

I. Absolutely. Loved. That. :)
I smiled thinking about those intestines waving their arms and the delirious lungs whistling... and I could totally relate to how that feels. :) Good stuff!
Peace and love/ Jo.

Hootin' Anni said...

I can feel this one!!!

Ps...love the photo below, of the sweet peas too!

Mine is "LOST IN THE TRANSLATION"

Have a great weekend! [and as always, scroll down a bit to find my 55]

Karen said...

Love these lively (and living) reactions to her thoughts about her man!

Brian Miller said...

yeah, i am shivering a bit too...nice 55 chris...guido, smiles.

sheri... said...

wow! your 55 left my heart flip-flopping with the thought of new love...literally ;) a very creative post, i loved it!

TechnoBabe said...

Every part of the anatomy gets involved in a new love relationship.
Nice 55.

Dianne said...

been there,, done that, glad it's over but miss the thrill

Chef Kar said...

"sits at her desk" ~ is there really any sitting possible with all the moving going on inside? Spirited and energetic 55! Really nice.

My 55 is up (though it's a "66" today ~ I granted myself an exception):

Friday Flash 55 ~ Butterfly Kisses

Mona said...

Full bodied Applause!

chitowngreg said...

Nice 55, thanks. Mine's up as well at http://bit.ly/8dt963. Have a great weekend!

Magpie said...

Romeo and Juliett, Marc Anthony and Cleopatra and now Doris and Guido...wonderful!!!

Tracy said...

Oh, this is great. It made me smile. I started reading it with a grin that got wider as I read.

Monkey Man said...

Someone has a pretty strong gut feeling about Guido. My 55 is HERE to choke you up.

Matty said...

That is quite a different take on a love story. Your mind is so artistic.

Andy Sewina said...

Phew, you got me shivering too... Love the way you used the body bits guts et al!

Nana Jo said...

A man named Guido is definitely likely to make a woman named Doris' all a-fluttery, thundery, shivery.

gregj said...

I think I'm getting this. It is fantastic.
What a great description of something very hard to describe

Syd said...

I wonder if she is co-dependent. Or maybe it's just those endorphins.

clean and crazy said...

i never knew all that was involved in a shiver great 55!!

Georgina said...

So that's what's happening to me when I hear my husband coming through the door!
I loved reading this! Thank you! - G

Thom said...

Excellent my friend. How clever :) Mine is up HERE. Have a great Friday :)

Alice Audrey said...

Whoah, talk about having your insides all a jumble.

Mama Zen said...

This is so creative!

Felicitas said...

Well done! If we were scoring, I'd say you landed a perfect 10!

Stan Ski said...

Emotional turmoil and gut wrenching go together nicely.

Jingle said...

outstanding 55.
I love the uneasiness which your words evoke in me...

Happy Friday!
You Rock!

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Very sweet and love so tender.
Mine is here
Have a great weekend!
Happy Mother's Day!
hugs
shakira

evalinn said...

Great 55! :-)

hope said...

Intestines waving their arms made quite the mental image for me. :)

Well done!

steveroni said...

So that's what is happening when my body just SCREAMS at me...

GoooooD "55" Chris!

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