A Night Sight
The moon is a white eye
cloud-lidded
in a broad blue face
and it peers over the hill,
over the giant supine silhouette
of some black, some dozing beast.
The moon is a white eye
cloud-lidded
in a broad blue face
and it peers over the hill,
over the giant supine silhouette
of some black, some dozing beast.
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The Sunday 160 challenge is to write something in exactly 160 characters, including spaces. You'll note if you count that I added a couple of spaces to this poem to make it reach the mark.
The place to check out for the rules is Monkey Man at
12 comments:
I think it be time to kick the beast in the ass and wake it from its slumbers, son of a bitch has been sleeping and dreaming too long now. Night needs rend day.
Bravo! I love the image of the black dozing beast.
Very lovely said enchantedoak in 160 characters! Blessings and hugs....
I like it, including the extra spaces.
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I like that. I like it very much. It's the poetic equivalent of a sculpture maquette: it's all there, but in chunky, handleable form. Excellently conceived.
I am such a sucker for that moon, I cannot sleep with it, Double
Dang!
nicely done, perhaps i will give this a try...160 yikes! i love the moon as well...and dreamed often of it as a kid....
beautiful.
Love that description in a 160. I am a moon child so you really got me on this one. Thanks for participating.
I struggle enough with 55 words! I admire you talented writers that make this look so easy! Excellent vision of the full moon!
a full moon at its best!
cloud lidded....was great on that broad blue face. enjoyed the read.
Have a good day.
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